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There's not much to judge when it comes to animation because there's barely any... lip sync is ok, I guess.
The thing you have to work on is your audio. Try to talk from little more far away or use popfilter to avoid blowing on the mic.
Also try to put a little more effort into your animations to make them longer and more entertaining. For now only 2 stars from me for not being utter shit.

StevenToons responds:

Thanks for the tips! :)

Fighting scene looked so badass! :)
Animations has it's flaws though, eg. bad audio. At the beginning I wasn't sure if that's breathing or some really weird snakes.

Ogilvietheblue responds:

Yeah, sound work is really new for me here. I definitely agree. Will do some work!

Really well made fights + interesting story. You could work a bit on some kind of audio eg. music, but overall I like it.

KennethRamos04 responds:

Thanks Kanahani, I'm going to make sure that part 2 will do have background music and high quality audio..

This one looks really good! I like how fluid and complex the movement is. Art style + colors + shadows are also the things that made me like it :)
I'm giving it only 3 stars though due to only 3 seconds and lack of sound.

HochiganMeat responds:

cheers! it was just a lil practice, and im terrible at sound design, so i thought id just let the animation take the stage

Could have added english subtitles at least - I give it 1 star because art style looks ok.

shin0bu responds:

Hi,thanks for your vote.
There is a new version with subs in English. ;)
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/680289

I think it should be submitted in "Audio" section instead.

Animation looks ok, but what's up with that black screen for the first few seconds?

tcox303 responds:

so I did put in an entry but when I put it in it erased the file so that's why its like that

Lol, so true. It's even worse when you draw, let's say, a naked man/woman and they start asking weird questions like "are you a lesbian/gay?" wtf.

About the animation - I liked it, it's really well drawn. I think that the last scene is a bit too long though. :)
Also, this guy is crazy skilled - he can colour with pencil! :D

Shivayya responds:

I thought the last seen was long too .. so i edited ... thanks for mentioning that..
and about the crazy pencil skills i guess you have a keen eye on such things .... i didn't even notice that before ...

I se a lot of effort put in here and a sound quality is quite good, but there are a few things that could be done better:
- Sound. As said before, it's quality is pretty ok, but you could add some effects to make it more believable. Eg. in the first scene when we heard guys talking outside it was a bit confusing because they sound like they were right in front of us. Recording from a little far away or adding some effects would be cool to make them sound like they are actually outside. Same thing goes for armour guys - they sound like they have no metal helmets at all. To fix it you can try eg. put a pot on your head (no joking :D) and record their voices to sound more believable.
- Shots. They are sometimes... confusing? Especially when they are talking. I know that animating speech isn't the easiest thing in the world, but It's hard to keep track what's going on when character1 is talking and shot is stated on character's2 static face.
- First scene. Like... what? Why it was so long? It just makes a bad first impression and can make people drop it just after few first seconds. It just feels confusing to me. "*sits there doing nothing* *taksthe paper* *staring at it while sitting completely still* - Heh!".

If I was the one to fix it, I'd do these things in particular scenes:
• first shot - add some camera movement, eg. camera slightly moving to the left to introduce the character. Just static image for few seconds looks kinda boring.
• 'reading paper' shot - add little eye movement from right to left like he's actually reading instead of "heh I can't read so I'll just stare at it xD"
• 'talking outside' shot - add some "being outside" sound effect + maybe only in the right ear? It would give more of a "some guys talking out there" feeling.
• 'confusing talking' shots - yeah, I talked about them earlier. At the beginning I wasn't sure if you were too lazy to animate mouth or what + armour-guys sound effect
• in one shot there's no background (son standing behind his dad), just a white color. Was it intentional?
• "you scum!" guard shot - I actually laughed how inaccurate it looks. His friends just died (I guess?) and he just stands there still in such a weird position and looks at the ground screaming that. Without a sound and the dramatic previous scene I'd think that he's shy, embarassed or kinda sad. I think that more accurate (but also harder to animate) would be stepping back and moving his hand closer in act of shock and fear, or else - do more agressive movement.

That's about it, I guess. You can also try to play a little with camera movement to give your shots some dynamics. Overall I liked it and the voice acting was pretty ok and showed accurately the emotions of characters. It seems to be a good show in the future and the story begins interesting. Hope to see new episodes soon ;)

eLLoWorlds responds:

thanks a lot for everything , I will work hard and try to fix this problems !

Glad to have people reviewing :)

Could be a nice animation if finished, so I'm giving a 2/5 to let it pass :)

Veesama responds:

:3, I didn't want to originally upload this here, because I wanted to put it on YouTube since Newgrounds feels more home for completed animations than animatics, but copyright failed me so I had only here. I'm thinking of completing it though :3

I like creating digital art. And eating bananas. Bananas are tasty.

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