Lol, so true. It's even worse when you draw, let's say, a naked man/woman and they start asking weird questions like "are you a lesbian/gay?" wtf.
About the animation - I liked it, it's really well drawn. I think that the last scene is a bit too long though. :)
Also, this guy is crazy skilled - he can colour with pencil! :D
I thought the last seen was long too .. so i edited ... thanks for mentioning that..
and about the crazy pencil skills i guess you have a keen eye on such things .... i didn't even notice that before ...
I se a lot of effort put in here and a sound quality is quite good, but there are a few things that could be done better:
- Sound. As said before, it's quality is pretty ok, but you could add some effects to make it more believable. Eg. in the first scene when we heard guys talking outside it was a bit confusing because they sound like they were right in front of us. Recording from a little far away or adding some effects would be cool to make them sound like they are actually outside. Same thing goes for armour guys - they sound like they have no metal helmets at all. To fix it you can try eg. put a pot on your head (no joking :D) and record their voices to sound more believable.
- Shots. They are sometimes... confusing? Especially when they are talking. I know that animating speech isn't the easiest thing in the world, but It's hard to keep track what's going on when character1 is talking and shot is stated on character's2 static face.
- First scene. Like... what? Why it was so long? It just makes a bad first impression and can make people drop it just after few first seconds. It just feels confusing to me. "*sits there doing nothing* *taksthe paper* *staring at it while sitting completely still* - Heh!".
If I was the one to fix it, I'd do these things in particular scenes:
• first shot - add some camera movement, eg. camera slightly moving to the left to introduce the character. Just static image for few seconds looks kinda boring.
• 'reading paper' shot - add little eye movement from right to left like he's actually reading instead of "heh I can't read so I'll just stare at it xD"
• 'talking outside' shot - add some "being outside" sound effect + maybe only in the right ear? It would give more of a "some guys talking out there" feeling.
• 'confusing talking' shots - yeah, I talked about them earlier. At the beginning I wasn't sure if you were too lazy to animate mouth or what + armour-guys sound effect
• in one shot there's no background (son standing behind his dad), just a white color. Was it intentional?
• "you scum!" guard shot - I actually laughed how inaccurate it looks. His friends just died (I guess?) and he just stands there still in such a weird position and looks at the ground screaming that. Without a sound and the dramatic previous scene I'd think that he's shy, embarassed or kinda sad. I think that more accurate (but also harder to animate) would be stepping back and moving his hand closer in act of shock and fear, or else - do more agressive movement.
That's about it, I guess. You can also try to play a little with camera movement to give your shots some dynamics. Overall I liked it and the voice acting was pretty ok and showed accurately the emotions of characters. It seems to be a good show in the future and the story begins interesting. Hope to see new episodes soon ;)
thanks a lot for everything , I will work hard and try to fix this problems !
Glad to have people reviewing :)
Could be a nice animation if finished, so I'm giving a 2/5 to let it pass :)
:3, I didn't want to originally upload this here, because I wanted to put it on YouTube since Newgrounds feels more home for completed animations than animatics, but copyright failed me so I had only here. I'm thinking of completing it though :3
That was fun, sometimes funny and really cute in the end. Art style isn't beautiful or detailed, but looks aesthetic and animation is really smooth and nice. It feels like it has some kind of message behind it, it can be intepretated like a story of a depressed person that was bullied and had no self-confidence. Your past experiences, or past version of you, is trying to convince you to revenge and hate - but it's not a real solution to the problem (that's how all the cliche villains are created, lol). You can't escape or get rid of the past, but you can create a better future :)
I watched all the book series and this video feels special - it's closing the whole series, but at the same time it works really well on it's own as a single story. Really good job!
Wow thanks! Nice analysis ;)
Okay, that was a really fun one :D
Good animation + nice humour + hilarious cartoon physics made me evantually like it more than I expected by watching first few seconds.
Hey, thanks! I had a lot of fun making it :)
I like the animation and the art style - I can clearly see that you paid a lot of attention to background details. Also, the story is sad and hilarious at the same time.
Thanks! C:
Animation looks pretty ok, I can see your effort here, but it could've gain a lot if it was colored and this croud audio wasn't looping all the time in the background. It's actually pretty hilarious when guy breaks his leg or somethin and people are still screaming happily :D
Not the best art style and animation ever, but it worked fine for needs of this show. Audio sounds ok too.
I like the humour in this one - absurd and hilarious! ;)
Glad you enjoyed and I will try to improve
It's pretty ok, though looks unfinished because of lack of sound and colors - that's why I gave you 2.
Well, that was pretty good. I like how dynamic this fight was and the end was pretty funny ;)
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